Thursday, March 20, 2008

Old Man and the Sea – Choices by Kyle L.


In the Old Man and the Sea, Santiago makes many choices that will affect whether or not he will ever catch another fish, or the giant marlin. When Santiago is out fishing, and catches the giant marlin on his line, he decides to stay with it and not give in. Although this really tires Santiago and he is almost powerless against this massive beast-of-a-fish, he feels he must catch this fish, which is the one he has been waiting for. This greatly affects Santiago’s physical health. He becomes weaker and the weaker he gets, the farther away his dream of catching the marlin gets.

One of the first important choices Santiago makes is to keep trying to reel in the giant marlin once he hooks it. He thinks that he has a chance at landing this behemoth. “What a fish, he has it sideways in his mouth now and he is moving off with it. Then he will turn and swallow it.” (43). Santiago chooses to stay and catch this fish, even though he has exhausted his food supply. This quote shows clearly how quick the old man was to assume he had the power and ability to catch this marlin. He knew the risks at stake and despite the odds; he decided to take them and the marlin on none the less.

The worst problem that faces Santiago when he chooses to continue out to sea is evidently the pain and suffering he has with his hands. While Santiago was trying to land this giant marlin, he sliced one of his hands. His hands are also very tired from all of the tugging and pulling of the fishing rope, but Santiago trusts his hands to guide him and reward him with the bounty of the marlin. “How does it go Hand? Or is it too early to know?” (59). Here, the old man is actually talking to his hand, the one he cut open while fighting the marlin. This tells a reader how much faith and trust Santiago has in his hands to actually be talking to them to ask if they are feeling better. He thinks of his hands as equal beings, not just another feature of his body that he takes for granted. This, I believe, helps Santiago mentally to have the will to continue on.

Besides physical pain, when Santiago is out in the dead middle of the Gulf of Mexico, he is mentally weakening. He has been fighting this enormous marlin for so long and I believe that underneath, the old man is starting to feel that he might not be able to accomplish this task. “But you have not slept yet, old man.” (77). Through Santiago’s lack of sleep and food, he is not only physically becoming weaker, his brain is not functioning as well as it could be. And that could ultimately decide whether or not Santiago makes it through this adventure alive.

When Santiago made the decision to keep on with the marlin, it might not have been the right decision in the eyes of others. But to Santiago, even though (we can assume) he dies at the end of his trip, and looses the marlin to a group of sharks, he made it to shore alive. He braved the viscous sea and overpowering marlin, he accomplished something that almost nobody his age could. Santiago may not have made the sane choice, he may not have accomplished exactly what he wanted to, but he proved to the marlin that he wouldn’t give in. No matter what.

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

(9a) Kyle L,
You do have a thesis, but it isn’t as focused as many other essays. Your strongest quote was in your first paragraph. You led into it and also explained it well, but the others weren’t as great. The thing I liked about your essay was its organization. You had a beginning, thesis, 1st example, 2nd example, 3rd example (with quotes in each), and then a conclusion that restated the thesis.

My favorite line was, “When Santiago made the decision to keep on with the marlin, it might not have been the right decision in the eyes of others.” It proves you read the book and understood it. It also shows that Santiago takes risks.

My advice is to check some of your grammar, specifically commas and run on sentences. Also, your thesis should have been clearer. There were only a few mistakes that I saw, so that was good. Great Job!
-Jessica R.

Anonymous said...

kyle
i thought your thesis was clear and strong. your strongest quote was the second one. you really tied it into your essay very well. I thought your conclusion was also very strong. Overall, it was a very good essay.

Anonymous said...

The Thesis statement is not clearly there but you can still understand what the thesis might be. It does engage me, but does not give me an idead about what is going to happen next time, to create the thesis, make it one sentence,an include a very short "summary" of each supporting paragraph.
“How does it go Hand? Or is it too early to know?” (59). this quote works nicely with this story, because it intertwines and teel about his hand.
One thing this essay does well is the attention to grammar and spelling. The introduction is strong, and works well with the story.
The only advice i give is to use a better thesis statement, and to use that statement in the beggining and concluding paragraph.

Anonymous said...

I thought this essay was well written with a strong and focused thesis. I believe the best quote was the one in the first paragraph. I believe your conclusion was good and ended the essay well. I didn't really find any grammatical errors, there may have been a few small errors with commas, but there were no spelling errors. I think you described Santiago very well. Good essay.

Anonymous said...

this was a very well written essay!! i liked the descriptiveness of the choices that Santiago makes while he was fishing for that marlin. i liked how the quotes went right in with the essay. i liked when you talked about his decision to not give up and keep trying to catch the marlin. i have no advice to give you, kyle. watch the grammar. good job.

Anonymous said...

I thought that your thesis in the first paragraph was not as focused or clear as it should be, although it was well-written. It was fairly engaging, but there was room for improvement.
I think that your second quote was the strongest and best integrated into the story, and also the most relevant to your essay.
I enjoyed how you described different things in the book ("massive beast-of-a-fish"), and I thought your essay was well-organized. Next time I would try to have more fluid grammar, and a more focused thesis statement.

Anonymous said...

Kyle,
Great writing. I thought that your thesis was clear about Santiago's choices. What I liked about your introduction was how you described what had updated of what had happened already in the story. “What a fish, he has it sideways in his mouth now and he is moving off with it. Then he will turn and swallow it.” (43). This was my favorite quote because this decision affected him greatly. He wasn't hinking clearly because he brought minimal supplies for the trip. What I liked the most was the conclusion. "Santiago may not have made the sane choice, he may not have accomplished exactly what he wanted to, but he proved to the marlin that he wouldn’t give in. No matter what." I liked how you said that Santiago just wanted to make his accomplishment and to prove to the marlin that he would prevail. I would only suggest that you work on your word choice. Superb!

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