You are my angel shining bright
I love you with all of my might
I miss you more and more each day
I wish you didn’t fade away!
I miss and love you very much
We have some memories and such
My days are very dark and gray
I wish you didn’t fade away!
I can’t wait to see you again
It is just a matter of where n’ when
And maybe this time you will stay
I wish you didn’t fade away!
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This is a great poem Erika. After I read it, I could imagine the kind of bond you must have had with your Great Grandmother. I liked how you found words that fit your rhyme scheme, but could convey your message as well. After reading it, I felt sorry that you had to lose someone important to you, but I thought it was nice that you have the hope you'll meet again some day. I thought your refrain was very effective, and you did a great job!
Your poem was so sad! The pain you felt is conveyed very well, and I know how hard the whole experience was for you. The use of an exclamation mark at the end of each stanza is nice because it shows desperation and longing. The rhyming was very good because it fit the format very well but still flowed nicely.
Erika, I really felt like you loved your grandma reading this poem. I also like the rhyming scheme. I, like the Rachel, feel as if you expressed your pain for your loss very powerfully in this poem. It makes me feel kinda sad.
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