Thursday, May 1, 2008

Silly by Joe D.

There once was a boy who played baseball,
who was fond of his Barbie’s and dolls.
During practice one day,
in center field he lay,
he got knocked in the head with a ball.

4 comments:

Anonymous said...

Joe, i liked your poem a lot. i remember when shower got hit in the face with the ball, that was really funny. the poem has a nice flow to it and i like the rhyming words you chose. i think your title could have been a little cooler than "silly" but it was still a nice poem.

Anonymous said...

Joe, your poem reminded me alot about you and how your silly pathetic at baseball. Like that homerun you gave up. Just kidding I didnt really care I kinda laughed. But yeah good poem I thought you used a very good rhyme scheme and it was a funnny mood. I laughed out loud if you ask me. Yeah I agree with connor silly is a queer title you should of said something like "this happens when I play baseball" or "what happens when I make an attempt at athletics". Just kidding your money I love you homie. Good poem though I think the theme was pay attention and stuff like that. Great Job son

Anonymous said...

Joe, your poem was really good. I think you might be describing yourself in it. I liked the rhyme scheme and thought it was fairly humorous. The poem was good but the title didn't really fit well. Good poem.

Anonymous said...

Joe, your poem is very good. I think the theme of the poem is if u suck at sports, then you shouldn't play them, but obviuosly shower doesnt get that. you used a nice rhyme scheme and it was a funny mood. Your had a silly title that didnt really fit your poem but that is ok.