Thursday, January 31, 2008

The Freedom Fighters by Alex M.

The year was 2036. By this time, democracy had left the barren shores of America. A strong tyrannical government had taken root in Washington. Freedoms had been revoked. The Constitution was shredded. Liberty was suppressed. Books were burned. Newspapers were shut down. Any voice that was critical of the government was silenced.

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But there was a rebel group named the Wolves who resisted the government oppression. They operated at night, out of sight of the government spies who were around every corner. They met secretly in the forest and planned how to fight the government. The spies and soldiers only patrolled the city, so they were safe in the forest.

Their activities were similar to other resistance groups; they put flyers in mailboxes, passed out banned literature, and occasionally clashed with government forces. They tried to stay away from the soldiers, because they were always vastly outnumbered when fighting them and as a result lost quite a lot of men when skirmishes broke out.

One warm night in August, the Wolves were shoving anti-government flyers into mailboxes, hoping to get new recruits. This technique actually worked, and that is why they had so many resistance fighters. But as they were about to leave the neighborhood, a group of soldiers patrolling the streets found them.

Gunshots rang out. The Wolves were being fired upon and didn’t have weapons to retaliate. So they hid behind houses, mailboxes, cars, and anything else that could provide shelter. People in the neighborhood, hearing the gunshots, woke up and went outside to see what was going on. There was a war going on in the street, and most of the people became frightened and hid inside.

Not all of the civilians were afraid, however. Many of them even sympathized with the Wolves. They were tired of the oppressive government taking all of their rights and were about to do something about it. The government had erased the 2nd Amendment, and people were not allowed to have private firearms. But many ignored the law and kept them anyway. Those that had weapons used them. Now it was the soldiers that were being fired upon.

Confused and scared, the soldiers retreated further down the street. The also had called in reinforcements to crush the rebels, but it would take an hour for them to arrive.

So they immediately started building a barricade which they could fight behind. Sticks, trash, newspapers, and many other things were thrown on to the pile. They gathered what weapons they had and got ready for the battle.

Sure enough, fifty or so government troops marched down the street and towards the rebels and their barricade. The rebels were hidden, and it was dark, so the soldiers did not know where the enemy was. As the soldiers got closer, the rebels fired upon them, in perfect unison. The soldiers regrouped and fired back.

The battle lasted for about 45 minutes, and the soldiers eventually surrendered. They had suffered severe casualties while the Wolves suffered only minimal casualties. The Wolves had won the battle, but there was a long war ahead of them.

After the word of the soldier’s defeat spread across the nation, small pockets of resistance popped up nationwide. The revolution had begun. The Wolves, who had only started out with ten to fifteen members, now had thousands upon thousands of members. In a matter of months, major battles had been fought across the nation, and the government was losing a lot of ground. By now the Wolves controlled 70% of the nation.

It was a cold December morning, and snow was falling. The government and its soldiers planned to make a last stand in the nation’s capitol. The Wolves had surrounded the city. Each side was preparing for battle. The Wolves planned to enter the city in 45 minutes. All of a sudden, a man holding a piece of paper walked out of the city and towards the commanding officer of the Wolves. They were about to fire upon him, but he held his hands up in surrender. They lowered their guns and he stepped closer to them.

He was tired and dirty. His uniform was torn in many places. He was weak from starvation and dehydration. He handed the officer the dirty piece of paper. The officer read the paper, as if he were surprised. Then he read it again, and again, and several more times after that. It was a note to the Wolves written by the General of the government forces. He had surrendered and was prepared to give the city to the Wolves.

They had won. The war was over. Freedom and liberty had been restored to America. And they found the Constitution, which hadn’t been shredded after all, but was being temporarily stored in the basement of the White House. The one that had been shredded was a copy. Books were once again sold and read. Newspapers sprung up, and people read them like they did before the government banned them. But everyone remembered what had happened, and they were not going to forget it any time soon. They made sure everyone knew how evil government could be, so that a similar government would never occur again. As their leader once said, “We shall always remember, so we may always be free.”

5 comments:

Anonymous said...

This story made me think of how the USA would be without a good government. When I was reading this essay I was thought of some movies of when the government takes over without the consent of the people and how everything turned bad. It seems to me that there are always some humans who don’t like the way the government is being run and others who like who it is being handled. In this essay I believe you are being portrayed as a liberal and you don’t want government intervention.

Anonymous said...

this was a very good story alex. i didn't see the government surrrendering. i could make a mental picture of the soldiers marching down the street toward the wolves.
the main character doesn't change over time because the wolves still want to take control of the government. if they did change then America would ever be the same again.
my favorite part was when the government surrendered and the wolves take control of America. this occured during the climax.
the tales best quality was the rich description because it shows what is happening to america during this time.
i thought this was a really good story and i have no suggestions.

Anonymous said...

I think this is a good story. I believe in government intervention, but when they go too far, they need to be stopped. I don't see this happening anytime soon, because the citizens control the government, and they wouldn't let this happen. The only way this could happen, is if all three branches were to do it together. There is no one main character, and the group does change. It relizes how evil a government can be to its people. My favorite part of the story is when the army is defeated in the neighborhood. This happened during the climax. I think the best quality about the story is the story arc. It is full and complete, and there are no missing parts. I have to advice to give the author. I think it is well written.

Anonymous said...

Nice story Alex. This story made me think of how our government would be if this actually happened. There was a lot of large vocabulary which I thought was good. Also,I liked how you brought the 2nd ammendment, and quotes into your story to make it seem more realistic.
There was no main character in this story, but there was a gruop of people who were the main characters. they changed overtime by gaining many members for their cause.
My favorite part of the story was when the Wolves won the war. it was kind of the falling action of the story because the climax was the battle itself.
Overall I really like the descriptiveness of this story it really helped me to picture what was happening in throughout the story. I have no suggestions for Alex about this story.

Anonymous said...

Hello Alex! I just want to say that I thought your short story was really good. It really made me think of how miserable our country would be without a good, strong government. It is scary to think that this could happen, I hope it never does. The main characters, the Wolves, stayed true to who they were and what they believed. They stood their ground, which was important because your story might not have ended in victory for the Wolves.
I think your good description worked well and my favorite quote was, " By this time, democracy had left the barren shores of America." I thought that this quote was really well thought out and started off the story really well. I enjoyed the resolution, when the solider came to surrender. That was a very good ending. Over all, I don't see anything that you would need to improve on. It was great!