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My item of financial worth is my television. I watch it at certain times of the day. This television is located in my room. I usually watch it at night, and usually I watch the FOX News Channel. This is because I am a conservative Republican and believe that CNN is biased. I usually watch the O’Reilly Factor and Hannity and Colmes. I am a big fan of Sean Hannity and Bill O’Reilly. However, I do not like Alan Colmes so I try to not let his blatant liberalism bother me.
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My item of priceless value is going to Church with my grandmother. My grandmother lives in
We dress up nicely, I am in a suit and tie, and she is in a dress. We open the doors of her car and sit down in her excellent leather seats. She turns the key and the car roars to life. We open the garage door and head for the Church on
We get out of the car and walk up to the heavy wooden doors of the Church. We are usually early, and she is allowed to come in early to help the Priest get ready for the
Then we go sit down in the front row of pews and the Mass commences. There is usually a song being played by organ. The last of the stragglers from outside come in and sit down with us. Once the song is over the Priest comes out and sits on his chair (which looks more like a throne). He greets us and talks for a few moments. Then, a man comes out of the back room bringing with him a Bible. He stands at the podium with the Bible. He opens it and reads whatever verse is scheduled for that day.
After the verse is read and we pray, the Eucharist is received by everyone present in the Church. There is usually a long line, and it takes about 15 minutes for everyone to receive the bread and wine. The church I am talking about is in
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Which is better? How do you decide? Would you rather take something that is of monetary value, or something that is worth no money, but is worth a lot in a different way? Well, if I had to decide which of these two I'd want more, it would be going to Church with my grandmother. You see, I can watch television anytime I want to, but I can't always go to Church with my grandmother. She will not live forever, so I'd better do things with her while she is alive. Also, I believe in an afterlife, and I believe that going to Church and praying will help you gain entry to Heaven. So I would pick Church over the television.
This was an easy decision for me to make. I have found that although many Americans would choose the material possession, I would not. This is a good thing. I believe that you are a better person if you choose the priceless event. It shows that you are not stupid and that you value what really matters. I just wish other Americans would realize what I've just realized. Possessions aren't everything, and more often that not, they cause unrest and fighting (like in The Pearl) instead of happiness. Everyone knows the old quote, "Money can't buy you happiness." That is still true today.
7 comments:
I think the whole essay was very good and entertaining. i think the paragraph about the television was weak, but the rest of it was very strong. Derek H
Hello, Alex. I liked your essay, you have a rich vocabulary which adds to the appeal of your essay. The television part of it was weak. You could have added to that, explaining more why you value it vs. going to church. But you deeply described how you value going to church with your grandmother. I see how you value that so much. That sort of made up for the television portion. But the church part was you strong point, and I think you've showed everyone why you value that.
If i had to give you one piece of advice, I'd say to "show" a little more in you body paragraphs other than telling. Instead of saying "There is usually a song being played by organ" you could say "while we walked in, the music from the organ illuminated the room with the sound of gospel" or something. Other than that everything else was great. Like i said, you have a rich vocabulary. It gave you essay a nice appeal which attracts more readers. Nice work.
Hey Alex,
I thought your essay was really good. It was interesting to read and had great vocabulary. I like how you say that you value TV and going to church, but if you had to choose between the two you would pick church. My favorite part was when you talk about going to church with your grandmother. The strongest parts were definitely the vocabulary, and the church paragraph. I think the weaker part was the TV paragraph. Like maybe next time, you could talk more about how much you value TV instead of Alan Colmes's "blatant liberalism." Anyway, great essay, I really like it.
Alex, Very good essay. Its nice to know that someone still goes to church. You had a very well written essay. You described the items very well, but the television paragraph could of been longer. In the the first paragraph you used the word HAS but you should of used HAVE. Other than that great essay.
Great essay Alex, I really liked both of your topics that you wrote about. I enjoyed all of the details that you had in your priceless paragraph. You could have been more specific in your T.V. essay. I am glad you wrote about the days you go to church with your Grandma. I really got a feel for what you and your family are like. I never knew you were so religious. The only thing you could do better is your use of vocabulary.
Alex, the detial in this essay was extravigant. I could really picture everything you do when you go to church with your grandmother. Its seems like the two of you are very close. You also used a lot of rich vocab. The one thing you could work on though could be why you enjoy watching TV so much. The conclusion really summed up your whole essay. Awesome job.
Hello Alex!
I really enjoyed your essay! It was very well written and I liked the vocabulary that you used. I easpically liked that you compared your TV to going to Church with your Grandmother. I am really glad to see that you chose going to Church with her than watching TV. You are totally correct about how important it is to spend time with people in your family, you have to appreciate every moment with them.
I liked your paragraph when you talked about watching FOX and CNN news. I like watching those channels too. I'm a republican also. Go Bush!!!! I also enjoy going to Church with my family. Overall, your essay is one of the best I read, most likely the best! You did a very good job. It really made me think that I need to spend time with family and not be consumed with money value items. Good job Alex!!
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